Liz

I like your idea, but it does seem a bit bland and the execution could be improved. I found your expression was far too obvious and direct, while the idea ...

Pretty solid idea, and good on you for writing about it. The faults I found in this were basically its obviousness and its vagueness. I wanted to feel for these ...

Generally good. You used an age-old idea in a pretty original idea with a nice extended metaphor. I wasnt too sure about the lines in brackets. Although the first one ...

I liked your content, I thought most of your ideas were pretty original, but I have to say that in some ways it had a stream-of-consciousness, first-draft kind of feel ...

Mmm, not too poetic. For a subject like this, which has been done many times before, you've got to create characters we really care about, or the emotion is too ...

Quite good, if a little stale. I just found that there wasn't much meat to it, so by the time the ending came, I didn't care too much. It doesn't ...

Good stuff. You've got a nice solid idea which is always a great starting place! I did feel that it was in some ways over-written though. The first stanza does ...

Not bad at all. Your rhyme and rhythm was reasonably consistent throughout and a lot of your ideas were original. WHat you need to work on is structure and punctuation. ...

This isn't poetry. I'm not saying it couldn't be, but at the moment it's not. So it needs redrafting (and a lot of it). Where's your rhythm? It's just a ...

Not bad. The main thing I'd like to suggest is that you make it more unique and write about your own personal, detailed experience. At the moment I see a ...

I'm impressed. The subject probably wouldn't grab me, normally, but here you make it work. Really work. There were a few things that stood out to me. Firstly, punctuation, but ...

Good stuff, powerful content and generally very well expressed! Some of your images really stood out in my mind and for the most part your rhyming works well, which is ...

Definitely you get a 10/10 for content. Some witty ideas in here about the different aspects of being 'lost.' But I did feel somewhat overwhelmed by the vague, overloaded words ...

I could really hear your voice and tone, so nice work on that. What I heard your voice speaking about was cliches, cliches, cliches. How many times have I read ...

This poem tore me. Half of it was really quite original, and I felt what you were writing about. Half of it was really over-the-top sickly sweet cliched stuff. But ...