Liz

It's kind of hard not to be a fan of religious poetry. It kind of rules out 90% of classical and 30% of modern poetry, doesn't it? Anyway, I quite ...

I really like it. The only suggestion I can think of is to fiddle around with the line-breakages to make the overall effect of the poem stronger. an unchartered frontier ...

Great. The chorus was especially good. Only part I didn't like was: "Rock is my life Music is my reason It gets me through the strife Of being me" It ...

Good. I found it a bit inconsistent, but overall it was well-written with a god concept. You may want to fix up some grammatical errors, but apart from that, nice ...

Great, especially the ending. I like the concept and the rich description. Only suggestion would be to either take out or change the "No," in the third stanza. It doesn't ...

I like it. Very abstract, but somehow musical. The only problem seemed to be line 8, which was far too long to fit the rhythm of the poem. Apart from ...

Not bad, but I think you need to fix the last line. It seems a little cliched. You also might want to simplify the line "nihilistic rendezvous, voyeur boys peeking" ...

i've never seen a baby photo of you. it may seem crazy but your mum never got out the old, dusty maroon album and sat me down on the couch ...

You had some great images in here. That was what made the poem. However, I think you need to fix up the ending and maybe expand it a little. Not ...

Excuse me?

This needs a lot of work. I'm sure you can fix it up. At the moment you've got a load of sentences which could belong to anyone. Are we supposed ...

Yep, short and sweet. You really captured the mood. However, I too didn't like the "planet we call home" line. Just didn't seem to fit. But apart from that, good ...

Ah, good thinking, how could I forget "The Scientist"? And "The Truth" by Steve Earle

Of course nobody needs a gun. Crazy.

I'm exactly the same. I'm trying a novel now and it's going well, the furthest I've ever got. I think this time it's more original and interesting to me, plus ...