Liz

Great. I love the tone especially.

Beautiful. I love the atmosphere. Well done.

Not bad, but I think you need to condense it a little, make it more succint. I also think the "Cheesy" in the second stanza didn't quite fit in, so ...

Good. I definitely got the impression that he's a real, raw guy. Lke Reichieru said, you didn't make him sound fake at all, so that was great. However, you don't ...

Yep, great idea and very well-written! Nice job.

she's the one they stare at with her "i love billy corgan" satchel bag and the blondedyedreddyedbrowndyedblonde hair sitting on her shoulders. the colourful bracelets on her wrist, the long ...

Not bad, but it kind of rambled a bit.

Beautifully written, and definitely gripping. I didn't completely understand it, but I think a few more readings will help, and that only adds to the atmosphere and power of the ...

I like it. I wouldn't say it's great literature, but it certainly is fitting for a Fathers' Day poem. Good work.

Not bad. Definitely work on the structure. I thought the last stanza's content was good, apart from that it seemed like I'd read it before. So, a little more originality, ...

Great. Good concept, very well-written. Nice work.

I like it. I thought the first couple of lines were a little cliched, but the last line of that stanza is great. Maybe fix up the beginning a bit, ...

Well. Basically it's just full of cliches, with an unoriginal idea, but I know you can fix that. You make me feel, unlike any other. You take away the pain ...

Beautiful. There's the occassional awkward line, such as "I stopped eating because I slept when I should eat, or thought about sleeping when I should have been eating." But apart ...

Aw, wow, thanks guys! I got such a shock seeing myself nominated...:)