Liz

Great. Um...let me try to think of some crit. No, sorry. It's brilliant. Great work.

Overall, it's good, but it does need a little fixing up. I am an ever changing metaphor living in a web of lies just outside the rim of realty Make ...

Well, it's not bad, but I have to say that it's another cliched love poem. I think you should drop the rhyme scheme; it isn't helping the poem and it ...

Not bad. You created the characters pretty well considering you improvised. You need to edit but that's about it. Good job.

Interesting, but it's hard to comment on such a short beginning. It seems a little unorginal at the moment to me, but I know that could easily change. I don't ...

Well, you could expand on certain points. You tend to skip from one great idea to the next, before the reader has an idea of what you're talking about. I ...

i remember summer days lying by the pool on psychedelic towels, talking to my auntie about popularity and how it was the same when she was at school. unveiled pretentiousness ...

I like it. Original as usual, and of course the last line was brilliant.

It wasn't bad until the last six lines. Then it was great. Nice work.

Not bad. Fix up the last line, maybe expand a bit, and good work.

I liked it. Definitely interesting, with so many ideas it was hard to keep up. Nice work.

I like it. In places the rhyme scheme seemed forced, especially in the second stanza, but overall you had a nice concept and it was well-written. So good work.

Rhyming is absolutely fine, but as soon as you notice it becoming forced, scrap it. It will only hinder the poem overall and bring it down to a level that's ...

Not bad, but it seemed a little awkward at times. I think you need to work on the flow a bit. As an example, you might want to fix the ...

Not bad at all. I think it would be a lot better with TBR's suggestions, but I did like it. Nice work.