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Weddings

I like. I like it alot! Very nice topic. Nice description also. The suspension was very well done, but there's one thing that threw me off. Like JFW1415 said: A ...

I never thought so many people would comment... and like it! Thanks everyone! I'll be sure to use all the advice people have given me the future. This isn't meant ...

Thanks for mailing me. I'm glad to read another one of your poems! Now, first I must say, this compared to 'Scream' was.... plain (for lack of a better word). ...

Sugar

Came up with this on the spot... but be brutal nonetheless! I see the flower, perched at the edge of my little island, as I sit and ponder. My eyes, ...

Woah. :shock: You were some twelve year old... I liked it. Very interesting. The voice is amazing, I feel that was the best part. Also, some of your word choice ...

Yikes! Sorry to hear that. I haven't gone through anything like this before, but I can sympathize. That must suck. It's a good thing you let your emotions out, but ...

Nice ending, but your intro wasn't strong and is overused. Just a quick expression I needed to let out, not much effort behind it, just instinct. Please tell me what ...

This is too vague. The emotions are undeveloped. I feel all you did was scratch the surface. This needs deeper meaning... and originality. One part I did like was the ...

Welcome to YWS! I'm sure others will be drilling you about the 2:1 ratio, so I'll just be getting to the review. This isn't very good in my opinion. 1. ...

Salt and Vinegar Chips

Oh yeah, another fav! Very nice. Please don't change the structure!! I love it! The quick, choppy sentences worked for this topic. I felt like I was inside your head. ...

Okay, first I must say... that repetition hurt. I seriously have a headache right now. Repetition works, it helps make a point, but not when you do so many, many ...