Livinginfantasy

You seem to be pretty clear on what this poem's about... so why no title? A title is something that summarizes your piece in a quick and short way, right? ...

dont you care you say you do but you dont show it and you dont know when you say you care you break me more when you try to build ...

Well, I can't give a truly accurate answer because like some posters put, whenever I start reading a book I don't like, I throw it over my shoulder. There's this ...

Banned for living "Where Love is Lost"... that isn't real! :smt013:

Unlike the first review, I didn't think that the repetition of "Mister moon" in the first stanza was very good. It seemed like a lot, and it was very distracting. ...

How cute is this?! :D I loved it. This was a very a very good attempt at poetry... I find it hard to be mean. This is a very cliche ...

I couldn't resist... another catchy title was calling my name. Like Swottielottie said, this subject is used a lot! But you did it in such a creative way, I can't ...

Before I say anything: Capitalize your I's! Please! I was cringing when I read this! :thud: paranoid thoughts in tow, i watch the world fill up with snow, and feel ...

Banned for banning.

I nvisible forces that bind me to you, are - L ike selfish vines, thorns that inxtoicate me with, O bsession, madness, irrational doubt. V ulgar desires sully my mind ...

I love the Buddha, He's who I want to be. Like the time he sat beneath the bodhi, to set his essence free. I love the Buddha, He seems to ...

The Tiger is loose in the zoo. Who would expect him not to be looking for an escape? Shorten this line, or break it down into two seperate ones, for ...

Before I say anything... CHANGE THE TITLE! Stuff like "No Name Yet" aren't going to attract people to your poem... or at least the people who are here to critique ...

Banned for spelling 'someone' wrong.

A pain in your soul, You seem invisible. A big gaping hole, And it takes its toll. People don’t realize, How bad it hurts. Your courage dies, No matter what ...