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This is really great! It's concise and clear, and everyone can relate to it. Just one nit-pick: "A far" is actually one word. It should be "afar." I like this ...

Hi there! So, this story has a great beginning. The dreams and the detail in those first few paragraphs give the story a soft, soothing sort of tone, but then ...

Invisible Man by Ralph Ellison: I'm obsessed with stories with strong character. I actually read this one for English this year, and I was supposed to focus on analyzing character ...

It's fine, everything's fine.. Just keep walking. Breath. Still, Paige's breaths came in short gasps; her lungs struggled for air in the heavy smog that enveloped the city. She scurried ...

They always say the same things. If love's a game, I always imagine that it's something like a convoluted horse race. Every Thoroughbred champion, the biggest and the best, all ...

Hi there. :) Maybe it's because I'm so tired right now, but I really had trouble focusing on the story as a whole. Its pace seems so quick, constantly jumping ...

Hi there, again. Your writing style sounds so much like mine, I'm excited to read this.

BUGS. Just thought you should know that. Note: My camera hates me. -Shuffles away immediately-

Hi there! The first thing that I noticed here is that your characters could use a bit of development. There are also other ways to improve, but I'll mainly focus ...

Night by Elie Wiesel. It's the Holocaust. It's so obviously disturbing. D:

Not that smiling at other people's pain is a good thing, but we've all been through it. That's the kind of thing that makes a song good - we have ...

Oh, this is wonderful! Everything is set up so beautifully and the words aren't forced or awkward. It almost made me feel as if I were listening to a song. ...

I've read most of the Maximum Ride books (save for the one that recently came out) and I personally don't like them. However, I absolutely love the general idea for ...

.. Not really, I'm actually not scary at all. (Even if I would like to think so >:D) Hiya, by the way. This site is lovely. Why exactly is it ...