LittlePrincess

Wow, I can relate to this and I'm only a junior in high school. These are such real fears, I like how you bring them out. My first nitpick is ...

Maybe this isn't exactly an Epilogue.. I don't know but it's the end. Thanks for everyone who has stayed with the whole story and sorry I haven't posted in a ...

hello!! Welcome to YWS... um, what kind of things do you like to write? Or read? I'm LittlePrincess.. you know the book The Little Prince? Maybe not but I like ...

My birthday was months ago but I had written a really rough version of this the day after my birthday. It might not be the expirience many have when they ...

Hi there! On to chapter two... Georgia, my five year-old sister, said latching on to my leg and looked up at me because otherwise the sentance doesn't really make sense. ...

Is this a sequel to something? If it is, well, I haven't read the first one but whatever on to the review... So you confuse the tense a bit, especially ...

Hi, so right now you are doing a lot of telling. Why don't you open up on 8th grade graduation, introduce the girl and give background on the relationship. I ...

Hey I like this start! And you know what's interesting, I'm currently writing a novel about something that happened to a girl the summer of her freshman year and I ...

I didn't really like the first chapter so I thought I'd do it over, it's somewhat similar, like the first few lines are exactly the same. The second part where ...

There isn't much to say for this piece except that it was very good. Since it's only the beginning I'm sure you'll be going into detail about.. well, everything. I ...

Hi. I like the alliteration in your title :) Just thought I'd let you know.. now onto the review. I wasn't expecting to see her for the first time that ...

Wow, I really liked that. It really demonstrates the emotions she has (I assume she's a girl). It's a very interesting style, and I will have to see how the ...

My dress was a harsh black, spilling down my legs and ending abruptly at my knees. My shoes were black, too. Polished and so shiny that I could almost see ...

No she's not, so should I just take it out completley? Should I put something in it's place?

Authors Note: It's pretty abrupt, I know... The next morning was cold; over breakfast Mrs. Mahoney suggested we drive to the little shopping center in Newport. The morning air was ...