Lindsaroo

Mine talk to me, but I don't control them. I just make bad things happen to them. Like my MC will say "Please keep me away from any car wrecks, ...

Fand got all the nitpicky stuff I saw, and I agree. This has major potential if you work at it. I definitely like the letter style of it. I haven't ...

I can tell it's obviously personal, but if you want my opinion I'm willing to give it. It's sweet and formal. I think you could have probably broken up some ...

The card is pity. The plea is insanity. Calling for ignorance And unwilling hatred. Twitch a little. Scream a name. Suddenly I’m not to blame. They made me do it. ...

Tayla covered most of what I wanted to point out. (i.e. "Mine" "fall over my head" and the repetition of "faster") I like where you're going with this. I just ...

Hey there! :) I don't have many problems with it. I think it has a good image of the whole "last hope dying out" type of thing. What did bug ...

Sammie, Witness, the streets, 6:12pm Sammie wrapped her arms around herself as she wandered the streets. It wasn't too cold, but she still should have remembered her jacket. Especially since ...

Thea looked between the girl who had spoken and the young man who was asking about...something. She couldn't even tell. Her mouth was too dry to try and speak, and ...

Simple, but seems like it could be pretty cool. Mind if I join? Name: Theandra (Thea for short) Nichols [Thee-an-druh] Gender: Female Age: 17 Appearance: Wears a black tank top ...

ugh okay so I'm finally posting this :P Name: Sammie Reynolds Age: 16 Description of appearance: Short dark brown hair, normally under a gray beanie. 5'4" and 150 pounds. Eyes ...

Hi emmylou, I agree with Snoink on the need for more background information. It's good that you got us wondering though. And I really did like the jump into the ...

Hey jMin, Okay so obviously it's been mentioned that you really abused run-ons. Like, insanely so. You really need to fix those up. My other problem was that you almost ...

I'm just going to get right into this. I really like the idea of him being in her dreams, maybe foreshadowing him which makes an interesting topic for a story. ...

Hey boston, I really liked this. I think you portrayed that hiding panic when the guys are coming out and all she can focus on is seeing him. I loved ...

Hey Eigee, So I'm going to do this a bit backwards but here it goes. It didn't really appeal to me. Mainly because it just seems to be this whiny ...