Lilyy03

8.5/10 -- sophisticated yet playful. ^_^

I never heard of it either. But, from the synopsis on Wikipedia, it looks to be interesting. And it most probably is good, since it's Pullman's... I'll keep an eye ...

She hoped she didn't embarass me? What did that introduction mean?

It's really not advisable to bump topics. Be patient and a critique will come along sooner or later. Though something that'll help get more readers is to critique other people's ...

For your question... I think it's been done both ways. I guess it's up to you. My main suggestion for this piece would be to not be so wordy. Your ...

Pssst. That sort of poll tends to not be popular around here. ;) Standing at the foot of the stone steps, Zephyr Mulligan and her mother looked up at her ...

Second Commander McCray and Fourth Captain Price of the Second Knighthood to the Kingdom of Darkness were crouched in the bushes near the borderline of the Light and Dark Realms. ...

First off, this'll be easier to read if you space out your paragraphs. :) A group of teenagers stood and talked loudly at the end of a quiet street. Heh, ...

Thank you both very much! I changed the bit about the dress. :D

Ah... Sorry for taking forever to get to this! I know I said I'd read it... Anyway: The Prologue Small ripples slowly glided up and down the beach, giving out ...

Prelude Sonatina in G Major. Adela bent forward to look at the tidy sheet of music. Black notes raced across the cream-colored page, spelling out some charmingly trivial tune. She ...

YES!! *dances*

Aside from not being able to stand the name "Marie"... XD I picture a plain girl with brown hair and freckles. She's quiet, but with a hidden desire for risks ...

furious that she

*frantically joins dance*