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(I'm reading this without having read your previous chapters...) It seems quite interesting. And yay, a talking fox! :D Just a few things, since I don't have that much time: ...

Kaz - Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. Phorcys - Thanks for coming back and reading, I appreciate it. ^_^

I think the first paragraph is a bit of an overload. The reader is just being told all these things, when it would be much more memorable and interesting to ...

Someone on NaNoWriMo--I don't remember who, to be honest, but I'm grateful to whoever they are :D--posted a link to YWS. I followed it, and signed up the next day.

Interesting article! Hee, it reminds me of a quote I saw in one of my old English textbooks, which said something along the lines of "If you think a flea ...

Yay for us vegetarians! ;) (If anyone's still confused about the terminology of stuff, this is rather nifty) Anyway! It's nice to hear about you, Aleksandra. It's really cool that ...

On Saturday I got "The Ruby in the Smoke" by Philip Pullman, and read it in one day. My gosh, it was good. The basic idea was rather cliche, but ...

9/10. I really like it, except there doesn't seem to be enough contrast in it (on my screen at least). Cassandra - Thanks! I did make it. :)

Awww. :( This had the potential to be utterly corny, but it wasn't. I liked how the memories were described both as they actually were, and with the layers that ...

Phorcys - thanks for the pointers, I'll keep those in mind in the future. Jesseble - thanks! You're right about the "But", I'm going to change that right now. And ...

I'm not too good at it either, but... what I generally do is just go through writing the story, and by the end of it some word or phrase has ...

I just read the first version of this--you've made some good improvements. :) But here are a few things I noticed that you may or may not want to tweak... ...

Wow, this was very good. Unique and original (and good job on fitting that picture into the story!). I liked how you described the whole process of the painting and ...

Silbury Street was quiet and respectable, if slightly poor. It was a street of old inns and shops, run by people in threadbare but tidy clothing. Between the bakery and ...

9/10. Awwwww!