Lil_Pau

Destiny's Face Tears will turn into stars, Leading me to a rightful path. Drops of hope revive my pulse. The moon and stars in the dark shine their brightest, Calm ...

It's greatly emotional, but the errors kinda hindered the flow of the poem (from my view, that is). :? However, it's still a great poem. Keep it up! :D

Distant Glory Raising a sword of pride, a shout of victory, A slash upon the sky and morning rises. My dream, just a mere visualization, Only to disappear at the ...

The Hungry Bunny Here comes the Hungry Bunny, With his big round eyes and a huge furry tummy. Run away from the Hungry Bunny, He'll gobble up all your broccoli! ...

Under the Setting Sunlight The raindrops fall this year, The fleeting afternoons are the colours in a fleeting bubble. Blue skies don't look that kind anymore, as I shed a ...

Disillusion A cry fades away as time passes by, Sinking into a pool of endless light. I am drenched in wishes that refuse to disappear, Nothing left to take away ...

I totally agree. I can see no faulty lines or mistakes there. You've done a good job with the detailed description of the situation in your story. :D Good luck ...

Spirits of the Twilight Into the opened-up twilight They soar and fly Up high into the sky A magnificent line between day and night Eyes of mystery Heart of beauty ...

A Haunting Pictures of the ruins fluttered before my eyes, I cut my hair with you in the mirror. The morning glory withers in the dark presence, Day by day, ...

This is a great read. I love the ending, especially the 'The slow cashier will eventually ring you up ' part. I can definitely see some meaning in the poem. ...

() Forgotten Once I used to live a happy life, filled with happiness and no strife. But now I had grown up, and when I look around, nothing was by ...

This is an amazing work. I love this poem. Rest in peace, Sable.

OK, I'll heed your advice. Thanks for reviewing, all of you!

Evanescence...oh my gosh...I'm such a fanatic of the band. I've been a fanatic since the arrival of My Immortal's music video. My parents are strict so they don't let me ...

This poem is also posted on other threads such as or EvThreads, so don't be surprised if you've seen it somewhere. Dyed Red The moonlight illuminates my heart, The candles ...