Lil_Pau

:o I wrote this for a contest, but I failed to submit it. So, I decided to post it here. Plz comment! This is my first time posting a story ...

Lullaby Sing a song to me, The song of a starry night. The moon is happy today, Its smile shining on the streets. While people come and go, While the ...

I love this poem! Makes me laugh... Very entertaining & fun to read...keep it up!

Oh, gosh, what a terrible thing! :( So sorry... This is such a lovely & touching piece of work. Since others have already pointed out your errors, I have nothing ...

What a beautiful piece of work! I have absolutely nothing to say now...it's so nice....*rereads poem* Good job!

Wow. I really like this one. It's short, but very expressive. It shows how much you love someone...and you've done a good job! Keep it up!

Bonsoir Open your eyes, Grazed by the thorns of a miserable life; Do you see your fate? Lie down, in the endless path of gliding memories...such wonders! Ah, sing them ...

Diva O Traveller! Have you not seen the angel of Hell? Her fiery touch melts my skin, Leaving a mark that spells out Catastrophe! The smell of burning roses, It ...

Awakening I float through the cells of my dreams, Embracing the multi-coloured skies That devour my soul. The screech of an eagle echoes As it takes flight. And the new ...

Gates Of Dawn Sweet singing bird, land on my palm when my feet grazes the morning's path. While the sunlight seeps into my eyes, this realm seems to fly before ...

Yes, it really has a lot of imagery. I liked it. Keep up the good work!

World Of Sin Clip clop . My footsteps echo beneath the dark moon as I stroll down a dead lane. The houses are vacant, the windows resembling cold, distant eyes. ...

The Tantrum Of May I had a little sister called May, She would cry for the whole day. Once her puppy laughed, She tore it in half, And never stopped ...

This is a beautiful piece. It has a lot of imagery and attactive metaphors. :D The flow is great, and the rhyming is good. I like it! Keep it up! ...

Alright, I'll tell you... This poem is actually a reference to World War II (Hitler era)...sorry if it was not that clear, maybe I need more 'training'. Ooops! :oops: :oops: ...