Lil_Pau

Barren Lands A new dawn is approaching, it's light shines through my fingers. But still, a sorrowful wind still blows. Far away, a child cries, With nothing but the skies ...

This is a nice piece of work. Since Cade pointed out your errors, I don't have anything else to point out. I loved this as it had a lot of ...

This is a very enjoyable piece of work. The way you write this is very unique and I liked it. Keep it up!

This is one of the best poems i've ever read. Very good work, besides a few errors such as the 'to's and 'too's. I really enjoyed this. Keep it up! ...

I love this one, but there were some parts where the rhythm kinda threw me off, and there were some parts that were a little cliche. But overall, it was ...

Lil_Pau enters and asks for a cocktail. Then, her eyes widened as she spotted Tassen, who was still dancing.

Oh it's OK. Thanks for commenting! Also thanks to others who had reviewed on other poems :)

This is a wonderful poem. I have nothing else to say... Good work!! And keep up!!

Hmm, this was just OK for me. I kinda agreed with October Girl; the rhyme was just forced and unusual for me. Also, if this poem is about depression, try ...

Hey, this is very nice! Good work! The metaphors are awesome, the imagery is great... I don't know what else to say... Keep up the good work! :)

Very nice poem! However, there were some parts that did not go well with the flow. It's very creative and enjoyable, with a lot of imagery, but it needs some ...

Very nice structure and rhyming! I enjoyed this one very much. I can feel the sadness & rhyme in this one. And good luck with that book you're writing! :)

Solitary Seas The skies are summer-blue, but they carry an unwavering sense of gloom. The sound of seagulls echo into the horizon, but they seem distant to me. A lonely ...

I would say that this is quite a good poem, but i didnt get the meaning very much. Try forming a clearer 'image' next time so it can give the ...

Its so...solemn and haunting. I really like this poem. It has good metaphors and gives the reader a sad feeling. Keep up!! :)