Lil_Pau

A Memento The summer blue sky was our world. Amongst the fluffy white clouds, there stood a majestic rainbow, tall and proud above our heads. Dreaming by the riverbank seemed ...

OMG I don't believe that. It would be...I don't know...I don't want to imagine it....!

Welcome to YWS! Wow. A really bright poem. I like this, but there are some parts that are needed to be improved... 1) Try punctuating every line. 2) And the ...

Thanks for reviewing, and also the advice! I'll keep that in mind...:)

Whoa! That's...wow...

Welcome to YWS! About this poem...well, it's rather sad, and I can see how much you miss your brother. It's simple, but it shows to readers how you feel, which ...

Good work, kris! I like this poem. The only problem that I had was with the ending; it was a little too abrupt. I can't really tell why, but there's ...

Nightflower The night sky was dimly lit by a single full moon. There were no stars to accompany it. As the wind blew a solemnly, a figure, dressed entirely in ...

Oh this was really touching. I loved it, especially the last part. It was so sad... Keep writing!

In This Life The roads are filled with people, walking past the tall skyscrapers that line the streets. As I stroll in the park, the lush trees, the soft breeze ...

Wow. I have to agree that the imagery is good. But it's kinda unclear of what you're trying to it something to do with life? Overall, it was good. Great ...

First, welcome to YWS! And yes, make sure you post at least TWO reviews before posting any of your work. Second...back to the poem... I understand that this poem is ...

It isn't really necessary to rhyme at the end of a poem. Poems with no rhymes can make great poems too. Ok...let me see...for me, it's just OK. It has ...

I love this poem. It was an original idea, something I've seldom come across. Sadie pointed out all your errors, so I'll leave you to improve the poem. Overall, it ...

Wow. This was quite good. Wise choice of words and good imagery. The first stanza was slightly confusing though, especially the line "losing astronomy to every light." But overall, it ...