Lil_Pau

Wow. Such an enjoyable read. :)

Hey Kalimar! Welcome to YWS! *Heads off to check out your forum* ^^

I agree that though the message was not so clear, it's really an enjoyable read, and for a starter poet, you're quite good! The imagery was nice and the structure ...

Such a lovely poem. It was really sweet, and though short, it was an enjoyable read. Just try adding more punctuation to let the poem flow well. Well, that's all ...

Blaze In the heat of the sun, I stand amongst oblivious passer-bys. As my tongue feels the whispers of the wind, I taste emotions, all mixed up into one drunken ...

It's a good piece of work, a display of strong emotions. The only thing I can point out is you should try adding punctuation. It makes the poem flow better. ...

OK thanks for the review!

Last Words Of A Fallen Eve I was born into this dark world, a blooming flower in the sun. But the tide of sin reached me, and my petals withered ...

It's nice, but some parts were kinda...jumbled up, and they confused me. Like Demeter said; there were some things that didn't fit in. But overall, it was a good poem. ...

Wow. For a poem written in only 5 minutes, it was really amazing! :D Yes, I agree, punctuation will make it better. Other than that, though it was simple, it ...

Nice work! The rhyme was quite good and so was the choice of words. Oh yes, just 1 thing...try adding punctuation. It makes a poem easier to read. :) Other ...

It's a lovely poem, Charliebo. Besides reading the poem, I can even feel it. However, of course, it's not 100% perfect (nothing or no one is ever 100% perfect). I ...

Wow. This caught me. This is one psychotic poem, and since it is, it's quite a psychotic read too...(kidding). You've got the emotions right, but there are some parts that ...

This is a wonderful poem. I like this, but there are still parts that need to be improved: 1) Punctuation - yep, I know, piepiemann22 mentioned this already. 2) Rhyme ...

This is a very unique poem. It's like trying to leave all the past behind and start on a new path. Well, there are some parts that need to be ...