Lil_Pau

Hey there, nova! I'm here to review your poem! Nitpicks: You beautiful, but the dire situation... Is absurd. It's supposed to be "you're beautiful." And there's no need for a ...

Hey there! I'm here to review your poem. To tell the truth, I didn't like this. It's one of those same ol' love poems that I read every now and ...

Hey there, Rosey! To tell the truth, this does remind me of Shakespeare, at a first glance. Anyway, this is quite short (for me =D), and I couldn't find any ...

Hey there! I thought this was really nice. I like your choice of words and the poem's structure. Nitpicks: I look to the rosy ribbons of light, No need for ...

The frolicking pony is very pretentious so he always skipped around trees. When suddenly groundhogs attacked nearby settlers who were smoking some turkeys. Howling winds blasted rifles, the men graspe

A good concept, but you have a lot to improve on this. Some tips to help you: 1) Punctuation Poems, like normal prose, do need punctuation. In fact, it helps ...

Hey there! What a lovely poem. I'm sure your girlfriend will like it. :D Nitpicks: The damsil with blonde hair. Shouldn't it be 'damsel?' Years go by and her serene ...

I wouldn't want it to replace bookstores. I love bookstores. The beautiful thing about a book store is browsing the shelves and being to hold the book in your hands ...

Hey there! I have to go soon, so I'll be quite brief. I like the concept of this poem. There's a lot of dark imagery. However, you repeated the word ...

Sounds interesting. I'd check it out. Sisterhood

It was a dark and stormy night.

The birds, silhouettes spreading their wings, take flight and dissolve into the evening. Watching the vessels gliding across the sea, a warm breeze embraces me as I began to sing. ...

Hey there! First, this poem was good, in terms of imagery. It forms a vivid picture in the reader's mind. However, the question (and the poem's main problem) is the ...

Hey there, jessie! First of all, I found this very sweet. You did a good job expressing your emotions in this poem. Nitpicks: Holly Magin, Your funny, Loving, Caring, And ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! :) I liked this poem. It's short, but the message is clear. Nitpicks: Every vessel in my being hates you; I don't know if it's ...