Lil_Pau

OK thanks for the advice! :)

Universia When innocence floats into the shadow of the world, It is lost, adrift in the unliminality of space. The hand of darkness is ready to take hold of mankind, ...

It's an attractive poem, and I really enjoyed it. Just one thing: the punctuation. It needs improvement. Don't go and put a fullstop at all the lines! (Take Stori's advice) ...

Although the poem was pretty simple and slightly cliched, you did a good job of expressing the emotions. It was really powerful and when I read it, it was as ...

This was an unusual story, but very interesting. You still need to revise it though. I won't point out anything since Chirantha and Sohini have already done it. Well, the ...

Friends Even though the years had piled on us, a heavy burden on our backs, you still wore the same smile on your face, bright and unwavering. Even though memories ...

Lol. This really made me laugh. This is really...outrageously unique. Good job! 1 gold star for you! :)

Wow, I like this. It's a nice, refreshing read. There are no mistakes for me to point out. Good job, and keep it up! ^^

The .hack series can be a bit boring, to tell the truth, but the settings and themes are really fascinating. The character designs are good too.

Hm...this was short, but at the same time, it was quite nice. I think if it was a little longer, it could have been better. Anyway, this wasn't bad at ...

Thanks for the review!

Hemisphere The glorious sunsets that had entranced me when I was younger, is now dyed with a dark red stain, growing deeper as years pass. Such is the result of ...

Hey, is this really your first poem? It was really good, really enjoyable. Good job on the choice of words and structure. The rhyme was OK, quite good. I have ...

Wow. It's really vibrant and abstract. Yes, it does remind me of Picasso. You did a good job on this! :)

I quite enjoyed this one. It's really interesting and has a lot of good imagery. The only thing is: [[Deep blue dissolves the sands of time that run through her ...