Lil_Pau

Hiya! Could you please review my poem 'Battlesphere?' It's for an assignment so I just want to know if there's anything I can improve. Link: Please and thanks! :D

Battlesphere Ash falls down like ebony-black snow; A storm of planes pass and the rain of bombs begin - In a split second, a picture of turmoil is painted, quickly ...

Wow. This is short, but a very good read. It's very meaningful and metaphorical. Since it is a short poem, I cannot find much to nitpick on. However, there is ...

I liked Half-Blood Prince better than the Order of the Phoenix. However, like Terpsichore mentioned, it was as if all the scenes were simply thrown together. Harry's acting at some ...

7/10. It sounds interesting, and I like the sibling rivalry. :) However, this is the type of story that requires lots of twists and turns, otherwise it would get a ...

O.o Wow. Great job. I really love the imagery, the tone and the message of this poem. I was simply blown away after finishing it, and I read it at ...

I never like it when someone says question like 'are guys or girls better at' - because we all have different strengths and weaknesses. I agree. I mean - come ...

I was still drifting slowly, staring at what seemed like heaven to me. I had always been fascinated with space since I was younger, and being here was like fulfilling ...

Hey zaneman! Welcome to YWS! Firstly, be sure that you have posted 2 reviews before posting a new piece of work. Now, back to the poem... Honestly, I didn't like ...

Hi angels-symphony! I'd like to review your poem. :D Hopefully the point got across in this one. It was another one of those impulse-poems. I'm having a lot of those ...

Thanks for the review Stella! :D I'll get on with the editing. There's another 3rd part to go, which will wrap up the whole thing. :)

Hey, angel-symphony! Could you review this piece for me? It's for Rosey Unicorn's "Which Path To Take" contest. It's the 2nd part, so you'll have to read the 1st part...:P ...

I allowed those four words to swim inside my head for a few seconds. My heart was aching for me to take another step forward; to continue my journey. However, ...

Thanks, Evi! I've revised some parts of the story. :)

Meh. I'll refuse the money. Food isn't enough. :P What would you do if your favourite show ended in a horrible way?