Leonheart

loved it, and ive read through all the critiques, i dont have anything to add. its just superb writing, and great imagery. very creepy, but that just makes it all ...

i have to admit, without reading the rest of the topic, i didn't understand this. yes, it's good imagery, yes, it's very well written, but i couldn't, and still can't ...

i have to agree with Claudette, there wasn't a lot of flow in some places. i also agree with that part that she liked, i enjoyed that myself. i think ...

good use of imagery, i thought it was excellently done. sometimes it didn't flow to me. some lines, especially at the start, seemed very long winded. for the topic, yeah, ...

the poem was great. there were little bits which didn't flow at all, and felt really strange to read. i think Adam got the main one. perhaps losing the word ...

didn't like it, although i loved the twist at the end. if this was written better, then it would be an excellent poem. i didn't like the rhyming, didn't like ...

welcome to YWS Hope, nice to meet you, hope you enjoy it here

a full review like what Adam gave would be very helpful...

thank you Claudette, glad to see that i've created a good piece of poetry in people's eyes, rather than what i normally do anyone else got suggestions?

i think i'll go for NaNo this year yes. i was a little caught up in life last time, and i wasn't writing much, so probably this year is the ...

i wanted more from the end. it seemed that this had a lot of promise, but didn't furfil it in my eyes. and Claudette's changes don't make it perfect. i ...

damn confusing.... but damn good... the concept is superb, and it really makes you think. i worked out on 1 you were doing it in reverse, and it took me ...

ok, so i'm going to make my own little changes, and repost here to show comparison between the old and new, i've taken Adam's ideas into account -------------- He’s out ...

thank you for that in depth critique Adam. i'll get around to aditting things sometime, but probably after more people have read the original and given some ideas

thank you Mandax. i do agree with the imagery comment, i do need to work on it. I'm not a poet by trade, I'm a novelist, so i want to ...