Lena.Wooldridge

This is not native american, Aloha, it's African haha. I didn't actually read this all the way through, but it seems to be written fine. Just wanted to clear stuff ...

Thank you everyone :) The term "spick" means basically the same thing as Gook, just to clear that up. I needed to give her a name because over the course ...

This has been edited extensively for anyone who is interested!

No to be honest it's mostly for having your work read and reviewed by others. And its not customary to argue with your reviewer, because they are able to pick ...

If you aren't planning on editing it, then don't post on here. This is meant for you to receive critique with open arms. Not to argue with the critiques. There's ...

So you and your friends go clubbing a lot?

huh?

The camps weren't called Kolyma, they were the Sevvostlag (northern camps), they were just along the Kolyma River. The reason he speaks out of voice is that this is kind ...

Keep in mind that the story isn't over yet... I'm sort of turning this into a novella. This is the end of chapter 2 lol.

That's actually not that bad. Might turn out better than I thought. And I don't really have any suggestions.. I pretty much fail at writing contemporary fiction, so yeah.

Wow, that's embarrassing. 1932 is like the very begging of the whole thing. Thanks

Thank you, I agree that the scene may have been flat. However, usually people do not have their first kiss when they first fall in love with the person. And ...

This takes place in Northern Siberia in 1952 along the Kolyma river. The Holocaust ended in 1945 So this is obviously quite a few years after WWII. That paragraph you ...

Yes! Be sure to PM me the link!! That'd be cool, actually

haha, its all good. Northern farmers don't really have an accent though :P And TravelTales, I probably won't write a sequel. Some stories are done, they don't need two parts.