Lena.Wooldridge

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Rated 18+ for language, mild war violence, and racism. As her smooth, supple face peaked from the behind the ferns of the jungle, he took a moment to notice the ...

This has been edited extensively for anyone who is interested!

I totally agree with Pozoe... For example: One kicked her stomach with a booted foot, not caring if he harmed her Change 'he' to 'it nad the red word with ...

No to be honest it's mostly for having your work read and reviewed by others. And its not customary to argue with your reviewer, because they are able to pick ...

If you aren't planning on editing it, then don't post on here. This is meant for you to receive critique with open arms. Not to argue with the critiques. There's ...

Hey! I'll check this out for you. NITPICKS He recorded the location of the hat shop, and smiled. The comma here is unnecessary. He followed his mark : a young ...

Alright... So please remember to put spaces after every comma and period. I'm in high school. I've been a freshman, and I know what its like to want to be ...

Hey, this is very well written. I did enjoy reading it. However, I do have a few issues with it. 1. Adele is French. Holstein is German. Shouldn't there be ...

I can't believe that nobody has commented on this yet! I must say that I absolutely love your voice in this. It gives the reader a very strong sense of ...

Okay, there are a ton of typos in this. Crescent already addressed most of them. My biggest issue is with the commas. For example: There was always something really wrong ...

This is totally sick. Do you draw out tattoos by any chance? I'm starting to draw mine out. Like honestly, I really like this. There's nothing I can critique. Nice ...

NITPICKS ...on bunks similar to the one he realized he was on. This phrase just seems really clunky to me, maybe you should leave out the "he realized" part? you?” ...

This is so short! Put up more and you will get more critique ^^ Wilo l ooked at the strange human standing by the edge of the building, what did ...

Hey, this is great. I just skimmed this, but there were a couple things I noticed: 1) Repetition of certain phrases. For example, you use the word glistening like five ...