Lena.Wooldridge

This was obviously very well written. Katy appears to be a very really character. blush hid her cocaine-reddened nose Blush is used to make one's cheeks red. Putting it on ...

Blood splattered the white porcelain floor, Great juxtaposition! Although, I did not know floors were ever made of porcelain... staining the glossy tiles a dark and bitter red. This is ...

Sorry, its kind of historical fiction.

This is the first part of my book, 3rd draft. Stolypin : passenger car for prisoners lagger : concentration camp maloteki : youngling contras : political prisoner blatari : petty ...

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Thank you :)

This is not native american, Aloha, it's African haha. I didn't actually read this all the way through, but it seems to be written fine. Just wanted to clear stuff ...

I'm going to give you my semicolon talk :) Enjoy. Semicolons are beautiful things. They make your writing look more advanced, and in general more pretty, in a complex way. ...

NITPICKS “Yeah ? ” I said as I opened my door. “Your mother says you gave her lip , ” h e said as he sat down. “She just asked ...

Okay, I only skimmed this, as I haven't much time. Anyway, I was confused about the times. In the beginning, you say it began "twelve years ago." Then, at the ...

This was actually pretty good. I have a problem with this sentence here, however: The first is back in Washington State, where I can watch the rain come down and ...

Every day, when he comes home from school, my kid brother Vern asks if he can wear my old blue coat. He’s only eleven, so I guess I should cut ...

Hola mi Amigo! I'll check this out for you, und welkommen to YWS! :D Alyce stuck her head out the door of her office, making sure that the Texna-Port man ...

There was nothing to hear except a cold, impenetrable silence that rested heavily upon the dankness of our cramped basement. The soft hum of the radiator was absent; there was ...

Thank you everyone :) The term "spick" means basically the same thing as Gook, just to clear that up. I needed to give her a name because over the course ...