Lena.Wooldridge

Hey Nikki, I'm here as requested :) NITPICKS There really aren't many. Thanks so much for actually proofreading your work. I did not find any obvious grammatical errors in this. ...

All of your semi-colons are unnecesary, just so you know. Also, I'd pick cooler names. Stan and Beth are kind of boring. Also, whats their relationship? Are they friends? hmm. ...

Hey Twixt, welcome YWS. NITPICKS Honestly, I read this pretty thoroughly, and didn't find very much. Stood at the front of a queue of ten people, Ian started to feel ...

Thank you.

Not gonna lie, I liked your first one better. The letter is just so blunt, that it makes it almost comical. Sorry to say. Also, when the wife hangs herself, ...

Okay, so I know you are new to YWS, but there's some protocol when you publish stuff. Like, you need to proofread this. There's no capitalization, the punctuation is bad, ...

This could quit possibly be a FAIL I just came up with this on the fly Just warning you. “My bologna has a first name; it’s O-S-C-A-R! My bologna has ...

This is written very well. Being completely honest there. I just have a few issues with it... :arrow: Burn victims that are burnt that intensely, all over their face, don't ...

Jeeze, this is kinda sad, depressing :( Hope everything is okay with you. Just a couple quick things, starting with the drugs. Say "dose of speed" instead of the ecstasy ...

Heeeeey I'll critique this if you really need help. Just saying, but this is way too short to be a full chapter. from gravities hold Here you are trying to ...

Hey Zeek! Nice to see a new face at YWS. This is very well-written. Keep writing. :?: Is the main character in this really an albino ferret? I'm sorry, but ...

Just want to say that this was like the most hilarious thing I've ever read. Your MC is amazing. You've totally made him, like, 3-D. Wish I could write something ...

You are obviously a very talented writer, this is very nice. Not too many obvious grammatical errors either. :arrow: The word "then" is incorrect here. It should be "than." When ...

Name: It doesn't have a name yet, sorry :( Still working on that part. Genre: Other fiction, but it might turn into Sci-Fi, not sure yet. Length: About 1,500 words ...

Thanks :)