Lena.Wooldridge

First off, I want to say that the central idea of this is simply beautiful . However, please do not write a sequel. I find it really strange that you ...

Hey, just stopping by for a quick review. First off, the basic idea of the story is good. A woman who was abused by her father, now in a bad ...

This is my first attempt at a romantic short story. Eh, I'm nervous. Please critique this. And if its too long, I might split it up into 2 parts.. hmmm. ...

Hey, this is just a quickie, I don't have much time. First off, I found some of the dialogue to be very cheesy. Like these ones especially: Gee, are you ...

As for the neck, big ear, little chin, eyes... That's what the guy actually looks like. I'm not going to change the porportions and make the guy look prettier than ...

Just wanted to say that I find it odd that you said that Ben loved the girl at the end. I'm one of those people who can't stand teenagers who ...

Hey, I honestly didn't read this whole thing, I had to stop after this part: Master jerked me off I started laughing and couldn't read anymore. So I'd change that, ...

Hey! : ) I'm just gonna pick this apart for you, cause I have nothing better to do. It’s a root of many sins, from adultery to crime, You can't ...

Alright, I just skimmed this, but parts of it just don't seem realistic to me. A girl in an abusive relationship doesn't threaten to "tell" on the boy. Its just ...

Thanks for the last one, it'd be nice if you looked at this, too:

Hey I drew this a little while ago off of a life model. It's pretty much finished, but if anyone can find anything else on it that can be worked ...

This was very well written - Nice work! My only issue was with the first paragraph. I might be just dumb or something, but I really didn't get it. It ...

Just from reading your first paragraph, I can see how many of your sentences could be improved. So I'm going through this line-by-line with the nitpicks. Hope it helps :) ...

Thanks everyone. I've already run this through spell-checker (I copied and pasted it directly from Microsoft Word), so there really should be no spelling errors :)

No. Because Gandalf, the archetypal wizard, also has a name starting with a G. Also, I can't pronounce it.