Lena.Wooldridge

That's actually not that bad. Might turn out better than I thought. And I don't really have any suggestions.. I pretty much fail at writing contemporary fiction, so yeah.

To be honest, this really does seem to be a cliched orphan story. Just look at the MC. The idea of an orphan believing that her mom was an actress ...

Haha, this is great. There's nothing bad I can really say. I have a couple nitpicks, nothing to serious, you might not even want to change them. 1) You use ...

Wow, that's embarrassing. 1932 is like the very begging of the whole thing. Thanks

Thank you, I agree that the scene may have been flat. However, usually people do not have their first kiss when they first fall in love with the person. And ...

Just saying, I can totally relate to this. I'm no poetry expert, not at all, put I think this was pretty good. However, the way you kept on making a ...

Okay, you need to lose some of the commas. Actually, a lot of the commas. I'll show you with the first sentence that has major issues: It’s been so long ...

Hey, thanks for your last review. Could you do another one? Thanks, this one is shorter. It's set in early 1950s Russia.

This takes place in Northern Siberia in 1952 along the Kolyma river. The Holocaust ended in 1945 So this is obviously quite a few years after WWII. That paragraph you ...

Hey, this is in other fiction, but I think its actually a historical fiction piece. Here's the link: Thanks so much.

Hey Durrie! I'm here :) yeeee. OLD VERSION The six lands of their kingdom, the ultimate sixth owned by a variety of persons, were connected together by Kenass Mountain. This ...

Once again, this is very "I did this, I did that." That part of it needs some work. The story is good, though. You do an excellent job of portraying ...

Hey! I stalk my way around the city. The word "stalk" just isn't working here for me. It feels like a heaven. Take out the "a" here. A gulp of ...

I just read your other two parts, and this is going pretty well ^^ My only complaint is that a boy who was theoretically born in the early nineties would ...

Wow, I really hate Karen already. If this is what you are going for, then nice work! If not, then try not to make Karen such a bratty little know-it-all. ...