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  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Hell is Other People (novel, Part 2 chapter IV)

    Thanks very much for reading. First, the repetition of some words in close succession is intentional, and is supposed to add a certain melodic quality to the narration. I did ...

    Aug 11, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Hell is Other People (novel, Part 2 chapters II-III)

    Hi again, The narrator of the young man story is supposed to be quite odd and untrustworthy; he recounts the story of Levin as if he really was in the ...

    Jul 3, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Hell is Other People (novel, part 2 chapter I)

    PS: It seems you understand the characters well, and I am very pleased! The young man is supposed to be an unlikeable person; he is bratty, spoiled (ironically), and larger-than-life ...

    Jul 3, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Hell is Other People (novel, part 2 chapter I)

    Hi, Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I appreciate the effort put in. First, I think I agree with your critique of the direct commentary. I shall have ...

    Jul 3, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Novel (first page)

    Thanks very much for reading. Several other full chapters have already been posted. Lemons

    Jun 15, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Chapters 5-6

    Hi, Thanks very much! I have almost the entire novel finished so I will make sure to post more of it. Have you read the first 4 chapters also? Thanks ...

    Jun 6, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Not following 5-7-5 haiku

    Always a pleasure to review these works. No problem

    May 23, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Novel (first page)

    I will, for now, skip your comments on the words and grammar. Thanks for the comment on the last paragraph, I enjoyed writing it and still enjoy reading it myself. ...

    May 23, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Dramatic, Health Re: Everlasting Life

    (I do look forward to finishing)

    May 23, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Novel (summary of storylines)

    Yes books with different storylines are great and all, but be cautious of those books that do a poor job with it. I imagine it difficult to write like that ...

    May 22, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Novel (first page)

    Hi, Thanks very much for you review. I appreciate very much the things you've brought up, especially your thoughts on the young man. I would point out that the prose ...

    May 21, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Novel (summary of storylines)

    (ps. the title is "Hell is Other People" (Le Enfer c'est les Autres). It is taken from French philosopher Jean-Paul Sartre's play "No Exit")

    May 20, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Novel (summary of storylines)

    Hi, (spoiler alert) First, thanks very much for reviewing this summary. I appreciate your review quite a bit, and if you are willing, I look forward to collaborating. Yes, I ...

    May 20, 2016
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: Finally

    you're very welcome and keep writing

    May 19, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Literature, Historical Fiction Re: Novel (first 4 chapters)

    Zsmith, First of all, thanks very much for the time and effort in reading the excerpt. I appreciate that tremendously. I want to note that I don't find anything particularly ...

    May 17, 2016


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