Lemikita

I shoved the feeling back so hard it tripped and fell. I absolutely love this sentence! Thanks so much for the imagery in this! :)

There's really not much for me to review here anymore. All the nit-picking has happened already, I just wanted to tell you that I really liked this piece (*goes to ...

Cool! How do you have the time to write so much? How do you get all those ideas?? Oh wait, I know, you don't study medicine and you're talented, that's ...

I understand why you don't like the part of the story. I don't like writing stuff like this, with a lot of dialogue and nothing really going on. You want ...

So I changed the few mistakes I had... I also took out a few of the "big words". I'm not sure how much better it is now. Is it still ...

Seeing as the spelling errors have already been found and corrected there isn't much for me to criticize anymore. I think you played wonderfully with the main character's guilt. You ...

I agree, continental continent is a bit redundant. But again, I am starting with the bad, which I shouldn't be. Intense is the word I connect with this poem. One ...

Thanks so much for the reviews! I'll work on the things you mentioned and post a second draft. Soon. I hope. @Amnien: I have three nephews, two of them already ...

Hm... a novella... No, I don't think that would work with this piece. I like this short story/monologue/other though. Of course your style is great and the above comments are ...

I absolutely love this story. In the first chapter, when you described that knight in rusty armor I though that he would be your typical "son of a too proud ...

I'm five years old. Actually I'm almost six, I'm five years and ten months. I still go to kindergarten, but next year I'm going to go to school. Then I'm ...

Wow. Just: Wow. I really like these pictures. The donut and hot chocolate picture look like food ads, rather than normal pictures. Really professional. I like close ups, though of ...

Enjoyed it, as usual. :) Powerful images, great style... I don't really have much to criticize here. The only thing I could mention is that to me the phrase "...the ...

Provoking! :) This is something that will attract any potential reader even more. At least I would want to read a story that starts like that. You may have given ...

General impression: Good! I like your style. Although you didn't use many words, I got an image of the speaker and the whole situation. What I really liked was the ...