Leahweird

Okay, you have some major issues with typos that sometimes make this hard to read. Droped words and wrong pronouns and the like. I would go back and fix those ...

Thank you for the critic! I'm going to blame microsoft for "fixing" stuff for me, for a lot of those mistakes, but it's always good to have someone willing to ...

Holding her breath, Callie paused and leaned harder on the rough stone wall. The cold ground felt nice on her sore feet. It was better now that she’d left her ...

My, this is a haunting piece. I especially love the last line. "Breath for me." I especially loe how it seems to go back in time from the start of ...

It might be interesting to have one of the attacking powers (we'll have to find better names thatn North and South at some point) be your run of the mill ...

I think formating was your enemy her. It's not always clear who the subject is, or who is talking. Otherwise a very interesting story.

Okay, here is a scenario I came up with just from the general outline you gave me. Feel free to pick what you like out of it, or ignore it ...

Agreed. I'm a big fan of playing with persections of right and wrong. Hopefully when we get this up and running we can get a few more people in to ...

Thank you both for your comments. This piece was practically just freewriting for me. I've been really busy with university lately, so short one-offs like this are really all I've ...

That actually sounds great. I've been doin storybook roleplaying since I was little, and it can be a lot of fun. An oppurtunity to get someone else involved while simultainiously ...

As a fan of Rick Riordon, I am really enjoying this. The classics major in me is going to me nitpicky for a moment though. This is just an interesting ...

I only recently came back from a long hiatus, so I don't know what storybooks are going on right now, but medieval fantasy is my favorite genre. If you want ...

I really hate to cause dissent, but I was going to say I love the beggining. It sets the mood, and doubles as a twist when it turs out that ...

I don't think sanity has much use her, and I mean that in the very best of ways. I LOVE this poem. You had me hooked from the first line. ...

My father and I have a lot more in common than anyone cares to admit. I guess violence and deceit must run in the family. I wonder what Uther’s father ...