Leahweird

Bryn, I've just started working on a larger work that will hopefully have the same feel as this but with more actual content, so your comments are espiecially appreciated.

Fixed those errors, plus a few others I found. I really need to edit better.

This is a really interesting piece, although I think using proper capitilization and paragraphing would make it a lot easier to read. Grammar is not the most important aspect of ...

Okay, so I origionally was going to leave this a tragedy, but I eventually broke down and wrote a happy ending. Sorry Fiyero! I really need comments on this portion ...

Name: Zephyr Else Gender: Female Age: 26 Appearance: (Includes attire) Her hair is naturally black but she tried to bleach it and now it's a dirty grey colour. Blue grey ...

Thank you! Sorry about the missing word, i'm glad you caught that. Honestly, my ability to self edit leaves much to be desired, but the is ridiculous.

Ohh yeah that line does have a major typo. I will fix that immediatly and hopefully get around to proofing more thouroughly. As long as everything else makes sense. Thank ...

This could get extremly interesting. I can't wait to start!

This is the next section of Callista and the Minotaur. Part one is posted here There is still a part three to come, but i wanted this section to be ...

The contest has been extended, so I broke down and decided to change some things aroung. A few problems have been addressed, but I would apprieciate furthur input. Those random ...

Up for love by the way

I couldn't decide which direction I wanted to go, so I made two profiles :) I've now decided that I want to play the older brother, Jenko, but I thought ...

If you wouldn't mind, I'm interested in playing one of Lamika's foster-brothers. Did you have any details in mind?

This poem is really good. I don't ussually like poems that rhyme, esecially if the y are short, but you've actually made the rhyming an integral aspect of the flow. ...

Well the dream sequence was horrifying. I assume that's the point? Already you've got me deeply concerned about what will happen when "they" find her. One criticism I have, I ...