Leahweird

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I think many of us on here feel the same way. I know I struggle through real life trying to express what I really ...

:) Thank you for catching that! I added some lines that will hopefully clarify things. I'm glad you enjoyed reading.

“Princess, why are you crying?” I was being immature, I know. But that ball was the only thing in my life that made me truly happy. I used to love ...

I think you piece could benefit from some set up. I have problems with this myself, so I'm the pot calling the kettle black, but I think we need to ...

I found that the action was a lot easier to follow this time around, and it was just as thrilling. I think your work shows you've been listening to past ...

I volunteer to make a character from scratch to be Aubrey's caretaker/loyal friend/whatever. I was about to go try my hand at a civilian character anyway.

I was going to offer to collaborate with anyone who needs an extra person to buff up their backstory or start up a subplot. My character history is still fairly ...

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I really like this chapter, especially all the attention paid to the dragons. (I am a fangirl). One thing I noticed though, "a mute point" should actually be "moot." Minor ...

Name: Sarah Parker Age: 26 Gender: Female Role: Surgeon/Researcher 2 (Questions Ethics of Procedures) Moral Strength: 5/10. For Symbiosis, but really on the fence. Appearance: Personality: (tl;dr, pas

I just wanted to say, I really liked how the action happening with the dagons mirrored what was going on with the humans. Very interesting.

I want to reserve a spot to play Maxwell Hyatt's daughter. I will post a profile subsequently.

I've fixed up the grammer. I also adressed some of your points on the plot. Hopefully it makes a little more sense, but I will probably have to go back ...

I feel like these two lines "It felt like the end of the world; death stalked people down alleyways until he caught them in his cold unforgiving grasp." should have ...

Yeah this is a great story. You had some words repeated too close together, and the description of what monoshifters actually are wasn't as seamlessly integrated as it might have ...