LaurynMitchell

Hey there! So, I really enjoyed this poem. You have a good concept and I got a strong mental image of a mother sewing clothes for her baby in a ...

Thank you, everyone, for your comments! I really appreciate them. :) In terms of the rhyme scheme, I really just wanted it to have a strong rhythm, regardless of whether ...

How many times can I look in your eyes and still find something new? How many ways can I say the phrase “I love you,” because, really, I do? You ...

I really enjoyed reading this. I like how you delved into what your character was thinking and feeling. I think it's hard to strike a balance between the speaker's thoughts ...

I stand on tomorrow’s brink. Caught between two chapters of life, I see the void before my feet— Life’s persistent current, never-ending. Only the years of alphabet and algebra Behind ...

I have a blog at :D I started it as a knitting blog, but I've started including random musings as well. I try to update about once a week.

Either cookie dough or moose tracks. Or, I had this peanut butter cookie dough ice cream once, that was amazing! The only problem is that I've never seen it since ...

I really like the concept of this poem. How many poems do we have about fancy feasts and desserts and the like, while the leftovers are ignored? :P It does ...

This is a good start to what looks like a pretty good story. I do agree with what Tori pointed out, though. I really like how you characterized Victoria/Serena Taylor. ...

The girl asked someone else out for the same date, time, and place because she lost her planner the day before and she wanted to go to her favorite restaurant.

You were able to pack a lot of emotion into a relatively short piece. This is a very solid piece of writing. I really like where you say in the ...

To Shubhi: Why yes, I do like smilies. How could you tell? :P The novel I'm working on is fantasy, but it doesn't involve magic or anything. The main character, ...

Thanks for the feedback! I proofread this several times, and I still didn't catch the last two until you pointed them out :P I'm glad you liked it!

Catch-22 , anybody? Major Major Major Major XD rank, first, middle, and surname and Willie or Billy

This is a very interesting poem. I don't think you need a period at the end of the fourth line, though: Grain like sand paper itching on an edge . ...