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Re: August Featured Member: Hannah!
Yay Hannah!
Aug 1, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Okay, last one! I really think that Darren gave in waay to easily there. If I were him, and this were my daughter, then I would be beating Travis senseless ...
Aug 1, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Back again for another review! :) It was almost like love at first site. love at first sight ;) We didn’t need alot of time to let our relationship build, ...
Aug 1, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! This was a nice chapter! The tension between Drew and Travis was good, a nice start to the building of some sort of relationship. What I really liked ...
Aug 1, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! Wow, I did not picture Travis as twenty one. It would benefit the reader if there were more of a description of him in the first chapter, because ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! A lot happens in this chapter, doesn't it! I have to say, I don't really see how they can reasonably convict Travis. I still don't see that they ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! Back again! :) So I'm finding it really strange that Travis has been more or less living in the interrogation room. It seems they would either let him ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! So I really liked this chapter. It does a lot of the things I had suggested in the previous chapters, particularly once Garry entered the scene. Also, I ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hi aj! Here to review again! I don't have a whole lot to say that wouldn't be re-iterating things I've already pointed out in previous chapters. I'm still not a ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! Back again! There's something so...unrealistic about Darren. He's a cop, yet he acts so...unprofessional I guess I would say. It doesn't make sense to me what he, and ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! This chapter was just a whirlwind of dialogue wasn't it! :P It's all very important and good, and the dialogue itself is relatively realistic (though there were some ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! I really enjoy Travis' "voice" as a character. It's definitely the strongest aspect of the story thus far, and a great thing to build a story around. However, ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: This is no longer a book!
Hey aj! I'm not typically a fan of prologues, but I liked this one a lot. It does everything that a prologue should do. It introduces the character, and what ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: Nefarious Purposes 1
Hey EAHailstone! Thanks for entering the First Chapter Contest! I really enjoyed reading this! It’s cute, and Penelope has a fun voice that is entertaining to read. Great job! I ...
Jul 31, 2011 -
Re: Out of the Dark
Hey Cailey! Thanks so much for entering the First Chapter Contest! This chapter was pretty well written. I didn’t find any nitpick-y grammar mistakes or anything, so great job! Really, ...
Jul 31, 2011