Lauren2010

Wow, this is really long. A quick tip, post things one chapter at a time and you will get much more in depth reviews that will help you more inthe ...

Hey there NaRachel, welcome to YWS! I'm Lauren, and I'll be reviewing for you today. :) First off, slow down! This was so rushed, especially at the beginning. Rushing through ...

Sae, you are obviously worried for no reason! The tone you take in this is really interesting, mysterious even. It gives Jemma more of an air of "queerness". She has ...

Buggy: Sure you can join! If you want to take over Flea/Dan who was Hero's character then you can. Or, if you preferred you could create an entirely new character ...

A.A. are you referring to "The Fox" storybook that is going right now? That is different from this one (though, I perhaps did borrow the name The Fox, and he ...

*just discovered the conversation in the DT* Tis fine with me. Madison/Hush is without an owner currently. I'd like to have her brought more in somehow, so maybe someone could ...

Maybe something could happen to the smaller camp that would cause them to have to move, and they would come to the bigger camp? Aisling This man wanted a place ...

Casey Lydia sobbed even harder when the lights went out. "I don't want to die, I don't want to die, I don't want to die," she said over and over. ...

Hey there, maegardens! First question: is this the beginning of a larger story? If not, it ends kind of abruptly without really anything happening. If so, then you're on the ...

Voted :) I think those new badges are rather snazzy, and do adore the "storybooker" one especially.

Haha thanks Emma :) Pretty sure DJ will stick with Heron. And as far as I know McKenzie and Aylen are in some alley with them (maybe?). Maybe Erome is ...

Madison/Hush He wanted to see her, the big boss man wanted to see her, and he wanted to know if she was talking yet. Madison cringed as she was dragged ...

Aisling Groaning, Aisling slumped over the wooden countertop of the shop she was serving her latest shift in. bored..." she mumbled into the wood. "It has been a slow day," ...

Casey No one else seemed interested in jumping up to find a way to escape, like Griff apparently did. They were all tired, it had been a long day so ...

Hey there Sophia! I really liked this! It was interesting and kept me hooked in. It has me wanting to know what happened before/after this excerpt. I liked how you ...