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Madison/Hush The doctor extended her hand towards Madison. She stared at it for a few seconds before realizing what she was doing. She shook her hand slowly. "Pleased," she said. ...

Hey Maine! Welcome to YWS! Nice, a fantasy writer! I also write fantasy. What type of fantasy do you usually write? High fantasy? Modern fantasy? Dragons? Vampires? I write a ...

Thanks to everyone who reviewed, this is currently being rewritten

Ray, our characters have the same first names O.O That could be quite confusing.

Madison/Hush Free. Madison was really free. She couldn't believe her ears. She had no idea who these people were, but they were setting her free. "T-Thank you," Madison said quietly, ...

Wow, slow down! I'm sorry but this was so rushed. It's okay to take things slow and let them develop in a way that lets the reader become hooked. Prologue ...

Hey there. I fail to see how "dark oblivion" relates to winter and snow. You go straight from the darkness to snow. Snow is white (and not dark). Maybe I'm ...

Hello there :) I really liked this poem. Being alone is something everyone needs sometimes. On to the nitpicking... Your stanzas aren't the same length. They don't even hold a ...

Aisling "Jaspar," Aisling repeated after him. "You may stay in my quarters, step right outside I will be with you in a moment." Jaspar walked out of the shop, and ...

Casey This was too much to decide at once. First, there was the button under the arm of Oliver's wheelchair. But then, there was the idea that it could be ...

Lovely! I'm the same way, I'm not much for writing poetry. Prose is my thing. I see others have agreed. That's good, people can relate to your poem. People like ...

Hehe, I adored this. It was quite witty, and made me laugh a few times. Fruit really is a rather wonderful thing, isn't it? Though, as a poem it was ...

I'm going to echo the others and praise your language. Your words are beautiful, and very descriptive. I was fine to understand most of them, except for denouement... could you ...

First thought? "I lost". If you don't understand that, good, don't try. It will eat your life. Anyways, I enjoyed this. I don't think any sort of game needs to ...

O.O *feels the need to go review more*