Lauren2010

Hey there! I'm Lauren and I'll be your reviewer today. I really liked this! You have a very interesting writing style and it kept me interested. The plot, too, intruigues ...

perhaps we'll just go through the first whole day, get killed, then start back from the beginning? That way we have a general skeleton of the day to follow.

Woah. I would love to review this, but it is very long. That intimidates a lot of reviewers on YWS. Try breaking it up by chapter (I think I saw ...

Hey there! I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today :) First off, I saw a ton of mispellings and grammatical errors. Read through this a couple time and ...

Hello again Another enjoyable chapter! I'm really getting interested in the plot. That's good :) Now on to my nitpicking around... When you describe the room she wakes up in, ...

Hey there! As Evi mentioned, your dialogue grammer could use a bit of sprucing up. But she provided a link for a tutorial so you should be all set there. ...

Hey there! Review time! I really liked this chapter. It's getting into the fantasy aspect of things quickly. Stories that take nine chapters to get into any sort of action ...

I really liked this! I don't care what anyone else says about this topic being overdone or the story not accomplishing anything because its not true. You have given the ...

James He watched the girl walk away, her lighter in his hand. She held her ground to him. He liked that. "Man," Kevin said grabbing his own lighter back from ...

James Olivia had put up a fight that morning. "I don't want to go to school!" she had yelled, her tiny voice filling up the apartment. "You're not my dad, ...

A doodle I made last night. This is NOT a doodle! This is fantastic! I wish I could draw half as good as you can. I do agree, the shoulders ...

Hey! I really liked this chapter. I only have a few problems with it... I walked into the living room and froze. Something didn’t feel right. I looked around but ...

I like the thought of being able to keep all the chapters of a novel together. I think a big problem with works in progress getting abandoned (at least when ...

Madison/Hush Madison listened to Alasdair and Jane talk about Alasdair's conversion to this state. She couldn't imagine being turned for a good reason, even if he hadn't chosen it. At ...

Hey there WritingSpitfire! Sorry it took me a few days after the PM but I'm here now! :) Well I really love your characters and their interactions. Crys and CJ ...