Lancrist

- In my head, and it kicked poeticism out. ;)

Thanks for the comments, you guys. Amelia - You made some good points and I've amended the story in several places where you enlightened me as to their clumsiness. :P ...

                                                                                  The continent of Falaurin once thrived

The quality of the writing in this was good and the story was good in building towards the final message. The major problem I found with this is the way ...

Not bad. I liked it well enough. I'll start my critique in a general way; then come to the finer points. I had two major qualms. Firstly - your characters ...

Part I: ***                                                                      Part II T he sun had already passed its zenith by t

I thought outside the box a bit, and can make that paragraph make sense, it's just that-- When the gargoyle says, "one less shmuck on god's green earth," I thought ...

It was a door~~ ...He knocked his knuckles against the door, making a thumping sound. This paragraph has already been highlighted, aside from the excess of doors, I feel that ...

I write this so that the thoughts of one who has survived this terrible catastrophe might be known in the future to those who care.           You would call me artificial. ...

                                                         PORK EPIC#4 Lionel Fortner stood at the entrance to the cargo hold in his abominable st

                                                          PORK EPIC #3 Small townships passed beneath the airship on its cruise through the sky

                                                            PORK EPIC #2           A sea of upturned faces watched the Pines Titan

This is a very spontaneous story inspired by a particular ski run I saw called "Porc Epic." (French for "pig epic," but I liked pork better). Just a bit of ...

Thanks for your comments, Rieda. The story is actually at about, or just past, its midpoint. Half the reason that I introduced Perecos was for the sake of putting action ...

Part IV added. May be a bit sloppy, but since I haven't updated the story for a few days I was eager to add more. Thanks again for the review, ...