Lancrist

This will be the start and hopefully not the end of a thread in which I will post what I draw. I did this one last night.

This was an interesting piece and you have the right idea in setting the premise for your story. I felt it was a little crowded with information and needs to ...

Interesting story; not usually my type but I read through it anyway. Like others have said there were no major problems with grammar. As for the characters, they were OK. ...

This will be the start of chapter 2, so I need to know if it's suitable for that. I wrote it quickly and havn't really edited it, so all help ...

Valoc drove his mace into the strigoi's skull ???? This is a little confusing. Please clarify. It is stated he carries a mace, and it is stated that the strigoi ...

The Red Road Home: Prologue The Red Road Home: Part I Nightmare dawn. It was a phenomenon for which Valoc still had no analogy. His world's dawn and this world's ...

Now, he could sit back and relax, and savour his time on Earth, which came few and far between "few and far between" is used after a plural, eg, "the ...

If you're looking for another critique I'd be happy to swap.

I shall be interested to see on what criteria people are judged worthy of living. :P

What? You're disappointed? Come on, it's Hollywood. What did you expect? I've never read Beowulf, and got what I was expecting to see. I was therefore entertained and have seen ...

Australia can indeed be lame and the theatres here are only screening Death Proof--and no fake trailers. Luckily, I was living in Canada when Grindhouse came out and was able ...

For my avatars I look at artwork, find an appropriate picture, cut out the bit I like and make an avatar out of it. The one I'm using now is ...

Woo, yeah, an Australian. Welcome.

Well my favourite spell is the gender bender... Jokes. I have used a spell in one of my stories that was a barely detectable (say, by other magic-users) assassination technique ...

I might go and read the book, the concept of armageddon/everyone on Earth dying is a concept I love (see: The Stand, by Stephen King). I'm interested in seeing the ...