LadyFreeWill

(This is kind of funny, since some of my characters are from another universe) Raven Lee, The Code of Black: Pain in My Heart and Soul Raven frowned and pushed ...

Chapter Two -Jamie Mystique Sorrow- Okemos, Michigan USA, Earth Four days before school Present Day… It was only a few days before high school would start and Jamie wasn’t divulging ...

I didn't spot any big mistakes in the writing and I thought it was pretty good. The only other comment I have is on the italicized and normal fonts. I ...

This was a really good story! It kept me wanting to keep reading until the end, but I must admit I'm a bit confused. Did Stephen die? I think he ...

Chapter One -Talia Marie Bourne- Brooklyn, New York City, USA Earth One year ago… “Stupid, stupid, stupid…” Talia grumbled, staring at the small television sitting on the kitchen counter. “-

This story started out good, but then the believability level dropped waaaay down. Don't you think officers of the law would ask more questions? Your story had the investigators dismissing ...

So... she died? Sorry, I'm in a hurry so I was only able to scan through the story. But what I did read, I thought was pretty good.

This story is really confusing. I think you may have plowed through everything too quickly without developing some of the events. You also didn't capitalize many of your 'i's and ...

Alice, How He Promised and How He Lied I froze as I felt a furry paw on my shoulder. There were no sounds other than my own breathing. All was ...

How He Promised And How He Lied My eyes move slowly from the bulky black watch on my wrist up to the world around me. Carol of the Bells is ...