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I thought it was a bit short, but that's not really important... The scene was great, but perhaps a bit more description through the five senses would lift the terror ...

Someone might've already said it, but if not, then I will. I was glad to catch the twist where Lillian died. That really made the story better. But one thing; ...

It is perfect as it is, but AS A POEM. Someone beat me to it.. But if you're still wanting to keep it as fiction, then maybe you should think ...

Chapter 2 That night, it was full house in the bar. Fred’s was the place to be if you were of age. It was also the place where Stan Pullman, ...

Some of the best lyrics are simple, yet effective because of it...

This seems pretty vague to me...maybe I'm just not reading it right. Either that or you might want to ease back on the distorted images of the dialogue, and let ...

I don't know if somebody already said this up above; i don't pay attention too well..but it seems to me that detail is missing. I'm speaking mainly about imagery. There ...

I was just thinking about this. I apologize if there is already a thread on the subject. But I would like to start off suggesting stuff to listen to, regardless ...

Hello, welcome to YWS! :) Firstly, I'd just like to inform you of the rules and guidlines. (at the top of the screen under "About". Please try to keep your ...

Writing a novel? Tell us about them here! Just a bit of basic info, like: Name of Novel: When it was started: Word count: Summary: (only about 50 words!) So ...

I woke up with a start and looked around. Shaking my head, I laughed at how paranoid I was getting. I rolled back over and closed my eyes. As I ...

Feel the night As it blazes by Never speaking a word And in the moment You can see What truly makes you What you’ve always been

I was hoping for cash...but I'll take your gift... Seriously? The fiction I write is scattered around. I used to write horror back when I was in high school, and ...

I honestly laughed my ass off. If this was suppose to be a greater piece of work or just for fun, I don't know. If it was serious then might ...

Don't know if someone already said it up there, but the only problem I had was how vague the story was. I know you're supposed to "Show, not tell" but ...