Krupp

A darker piece, but an admirable one. The only things I think should be considered is the beginning where the protagonist describes the scene of her husband's death. I think ...

The ending was the finest part of the whole thing. Keep that. The only thing I would suggest is giving us a bit more background on the protagonist, like Soul ...

Thanks for the critiquing. Most of my stuff is in the Other Fiction part...

I just honestly use Microsoft Word and start writing...I don't use any setting changes. The font I use pretty much all of the time is Courier New, or Times New ...

Well...I'll be honest. Great story. But there are a few things you're going to wanna fix if you want to improve it. Grammar: You definitely should get someone you know ...

Dawson was up before he knew it, eyes blurry, and his neck cursing him for sleeping wrong…again. The sun was piercing through the shade, giving the room a thin piece ...

Overall, I thought the piece was great, but the last stanza confused things. I wasn't sure whether or not the writer was internally arguing with herself or thinking about someone ...

I think the only thing that threw me off was the space between the two stanzas. It didn't think it was really necessary...but then again, who am I to say ...

This running has got me down. I’m sweating, chest on fire. Waiting for yet another wave, To hit me and send me crashing, Straight back to square one. This terror ...

I think the first part, the part before the past becomes present tense, is the best part of the story. Maybe later you could expand a tad more on the ...

Desire Do I want it? Can I hold on? Or will I press forward Burying the end once again? It's safe to say I've never tried To learn the first ...

The mere thought that there could ever be a lord of pigeons is quite humorous...what would the world be like then, I wonder?

...I thought this was a literal question about real torture...I would've said it couldn't hurt to remind your character what physical pain really is like...Never mind that though.

Trapped My soul is enclosed in a diamond-studded box With no room to move and nothing to eat Where the voices of my love ones are taunting me Destroying my ...

Chapter 3 Sam Young was up early, in the gym. It was a ritual he’d been performing for years and years, since he was fifteen. Get up early, run six ...