Krupp

This sounds like a good outline. I'm expecting it (some of it anyways) to get put into writing soon..

He cannot confess what he has not done during his trial underneath the sun. And yet enduring his burden he smiles, making his troubles seem gray and mild. Scathed by ...

This is a letter to Maynard James Keenan of Tool, Zach De La Rocha of Rage Against the Machine, and Karl Marx: Excuse my ignorance, dear sirs, Didn't know you ...

Oh god....here I go. Tool, The Offspring, Linkin Park, Disturbed, A Perfect Circle, Puscifer, King Crimson, Limp Bizkit, The Nightwatchman, Black Sabbath, Led Zepplin, Godsmack, He is Legend, Fuel, Fe

Welcome to the club...if you like this sort of thing, that is...

I never have used a quote to start things off. I'd rather kick things into gear by giving a vivid description of the scene instead..

It would be simpler for me, if you would pretend you couldn’t listen. See I’ve lost track of these things of where the X once marked the spot. Simply put, ...

The only thing that should be addressed is the grammar. Either throw some commas in here and there or something, but don't leave it as it is. It's kind of ...

It's vivid, and that's a good start. I suggest that you should break some of the lines in half, especially the one that starts off: "It's been eight months since..." ...

Indeed. What a day so far.

So everyday it's all the same The morning set in a background of Grey Nighttime just an illusion to shield our thoughts Have you ever wondered why we're set apart? ...

Oddly enough, this doesn't strike me as a seems more like prose. Cut down the length of every line, maybe. It just seems more prose-ish as it is.

I'm not bothered by the cliche part of it. A lot of things are cliche nowadays; hey, even claiming something is cliche is cliche'd. Pretty sad. The poem's great, but ...

I had to change the rating for the sake of the story. Sorry guys. Here's chapter 2 at any rate. “Dude!” Dawson felt someone slap his cheek several times. The ...

I am 15 years old, and have never been more ready to publish. My novel is complete, edited, I've gotten feedback...I have been doing the research and have my list ...