Krupp

This sounds like a dark-humor kind of story. At least, that's how I read it... I'm interested in the protagonist; I wrote a character fairly similar to him once. He ...

Hate to say it, mate, but this doesn't really strike me as poetry... More of spoken word or prose, really. But that doesn't mean it's bad. It's just a bit ...

I felt it was very repetitive. This is how I felt also. I've seen a few poems like this on this website as of late. It's not adding anything really ...

These other two posters basically said what I would've...try to make it a bit more creative; try to describe the fallen heroes, or maybe try describing their exploits in each ...

To be quite honest, I had no idea what the poem was talking about. I mean, I write pretty vaguely as well, but this just completely obscures any ideas the ...

Short and simple...the piece runs well, and I can't see any real glaring errors... Not bad at all. Try to incorporate more imagery if you can next time.

The poem seems disjointed to me; I don't know if I"m just reading the way you patterned the writing wrong or what, but I found the writing a bit vague ...

I think Eimear pointed out everything I was gonna cover... As for a title..uh, well, I can't specifically give you any suggestions. That would rob you of that pleasure. I ...

The poem was pretty simple, but in honest truth I really didn't see anything that absolutely needed correcting. So there, take it and run with it. Keep putting stuff out, ...

The action sequences were decent. It started off great, and along the way somewhere it lost momentum. The action made up for it, and Harrison Ford's just a great actor, ...

I have gone too far Just to claim what is mine. The stars in the sky will never say a word No witnesses in the dark. I clench my fists ...

And here I was gonna say all you needed is a bit of boredom, a catalyst for imagination, and recklessly impulsive behavior...

I used to be able to say that I would love that kind of list...but my tastes have changed in such extreme ways that I'm afraid no one would want ...

It's cool to see someone else on here trying to get involved in making beats and whatnot... I actually posted my entire album in here too...don't know where it's at ...

Ah, but let's not forget how hockey or boxing is...or NFL for that matter. The thing is about contact sport, no matter what happens, there's always the risk of injury ...