Krupp

Welcome and have a good one, Krupp

Sounds like a bunch of thoughts that were strung off in rapid, machine-gun fashion... And that makes it uncomfortable to read. The clautstrophobic feel of the poem in that case ...

yeah...unfortunate as it is, just read it. And don't read it as if you're bored; if you do that you won't be able to retain anything or take anything from ...

um...teenaged drama? You got me. The Opposite Others

Well, I'll just be honest. The rhyming scheme worked, but I feel that the scheme actually drained the poem a bit. I think the piece would've done better as lyrics ...

I switch between Courier New and Times New Roman...I use the former mostly though.

Another situational topic...the one I"d previously described in my other piece like this. The situation of being hit by a car... It all was slow. Or was it so fast ...

This was much appreciated as a really speaks to me. A bit simplistic in nature, but the message is strong enough to make up for the simplicity. That's great, because ...

To be honest, I had a hard time trying to figure out what you were trying to say exactly... Was this piece a metaphor about taking risks in life? If ...

I sometimes get my ideas for stories or poetry from simply thinking about something stupid. Maybe one day, I'll say, "What's it like to get hit by a car? Does ...

that's odd...I apologize if I wrecked the machine entirely...don't know what went wrong exactly..

I will say one thing about this certainly draws you in...I'm really liking the characters so far, and the story itself is one that really has a unique feel to ...

I'll post a critique when I've finished..

Quite honestly, I never plan things out really. I just make it up as I go along...except for times when I have a clear ending or idea for a twist, ...

I think the only thing I do right as a writer is tell stories. That's about it; i'm not much with grammar, i'm eloquent only when I'm doing a speech. ...