Krupp

The poem is effectively brilliant, except that I think that how you twisted some of the lines, the meaning gets confusing. Some lines were better than others, but that's how ...

I admire the creative staggering of lines and the certainly adds to the buildup of the poem throughout the piece. However, if you were trying to really be creative in ...

Now this was terrific. Congratulations, I don't really have anything to say. I was left standing impressed after reading that. My apologies if you were looking for some in-depth critique, ...

This reads more like prose to me, but that's not a big deal. It's good, but the problem is that it isn't challenging to read; I didn't see anything that ...

...still into the metal, eh? The only thing that reallybothered me about this is spelling. Luck = lock I'm guessing, so just watch out for things like that. A mispelling ...

Thanks people. Just thought I'd check. Some people think it's highly offensive to write about a terrorist from his own viewpoint and try to justify his I figured it wouldn't ...

Well, I have yet another idea for a story that'll probably be put to use in the future. The problem is, I am thinking it may not be appropriate, so ...

...well, to be honest, I haven't read the rest of the story, so I really have no idea the whole story, of course...but seeing that this was getting no replies ...

...A Charlie Deaux short film named Zoetrope (with Lustmord doing the soundtrack) has inspired my newest attempt at writing: A screenplay. We shall see if it is any good.

This is my first time trying a script. I am planning on having friends here on my campus film this eventually and make it into a short film or something. ...

This is defenitely a big help. Much obliged.

As a fellow college student who went through the American high school system, I think your story would be much more believable if you used 11th graders (juniors) than 9th ...

This is brilliant. It's almost as good as reading through the lyrics of a Tool song. The only thing I would advise is to just get rid of the periods ...

Well, seeing as a lot of kids need inspiration now, I'd thought I'd try and help. A lot of you happen to have trouble with titles or character names or ...

Thanks to the Melvins and Lustmord for their Pigs of the Roman Empire collaboration album. It's been a while since I've written something this dark. I won't rate this, but ...