Krokee64

^^^^^To the post above me^^^^^ I was afraid I was using too many commas. I like commas. Also about the description part, I just try to describe what I think ...

This takes place in a not so distant future, in one of America's now (in the not so distant future) decaying societies. The character David Beckman has nothing to do ...

This is good, but I feel like it is the skeleton of a story, not the whole thing. I think you put too much time into thinking about what will ...

I love the concept and the writing is good. Just a few typos but that'll happen with a first draft. I really liked the creativity with the concept. The only ...

Very interesting. I like the creativeness and originality. It leaves me wondering what will happen next.

The world is spinning in deep effect One sentinel standing, alone and erect All fades away through a phantasm blur Where nothing is And nothing were I welcome reveiws and ...

Godd writing, just a couple of suggestions. First of all, your a good writer but your idea isn't original at all. It's Xmen. If you would want to publish that ...