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What I love about this piece is that you say so much without SAYING it. You can tell that you are very nervous, and uncomfortable, without saying, "I felt nervous ...

I don't know why you say it's confusing. It's intriguing, and detailed. I love how you describe the situation in such detail without ruining the reader's room for imagination. If ...

(I know this may not be my best work, but it's what I was feeling and I had to get it off my chest.) it's so cold in here i ...

This is a great poem. Obviously you are an amazing writer. If I were you, I would try to expand this piece a little more to make the point clearer. ...

First of all, you people do NOT know how to give constructive criticism, especially Medusa. Read your work, Medusa, your a great writer. But Christ, please stop commenting, for everyone's ...

First of all, this is a great attempt at a first poem. Mine was worse then this - remember that as I say the following: I do not like this ...

whoah. I am not sure where to start here. Um... first of all, that was a really incredible poem. The structure could have been clearer, and the way that you ...

That was great!! I loved the way that you used metephors and extensive word choice. An excellent piece - keep writing!

(First of all, I want everyone to know that I am re-editing it after some thoughtful comments from some people. It was a very confusing poem that was hard to ...

this poem painted a detailed description of the set without being abrupt - it was very subtle, which is a handy skill to have as a writer. This poem was ...

I think that it didn't need as much explanation in the beginning - it seems almost like a warning, like "look out for this poem! It bites!!" Which isn't a ...

I loved this poem. It had a great feel to it - alive and passionate, with a very clear message and imaginitive rhymes. Your a great poet!! Keep writing, you ...

This is just a monologue with line breaks. I can see why you named it the way you did.

My views on Harry Potter... It's kinda stupid, but some people freak out a bit much about it. Like how Dumbldore was supposedly gay? Who cares? It's a character in ...

I personally think the opening was great - very vauge until it catches on. The idea of the popular girl's secrets is great!! I loved it. I would have liked ...