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  • Lyric Poetry Re: Playing Clichés

    This. Is so. Adorable. I just had to say that. Now for real commentary: I won’t promise you the moon, it’s not for me to give. very cute, and creative ...

    Fri Sep 11, 2009 11:23 pm
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Fading Away

    First of all, take out the explanation. If you have to explain to your reader what the poem/story/essay/whatever it may be that you are writing is about for them to ...

    Thu Jan 08, 2009 7:55 pm
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Faith

    Thanks for all your help, everyone! I've decided to submit it for the YWS journal. :)

    Tue Jan 06, 2009 6:14 am
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Faith

    No, the fire thing was NOT a reference to the bible. I'd completely forgotten about that story. I think the last time I heard that story was when I watched ...

    Tue Dec 30, 2008 11:52 pm
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Faith

    I'd also like to add, in mild resentment, that you had so many notes that I had to open up a seperate window and pull up the actual review because ...

    Fri Dec 26, 2008 10:48 am
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Faith

    Yeah, after reading this I realize not a lot of this made sense. I'm revising my butt off here, and just hoping and hoping that it will turn out really ...

    Fri Dec 26, 2008 10:37 am
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Faith

    Oh my gosh, thank you guys so much. Loving the reviews, here. You guys really obviously took your time with your review, and I'm freaking ETERNALLY GRATEFUL for this. I'll ...

    Thu Dec 25, 2008 9:48 am
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Behind The Glass

    Wow. This poem in really intense. You have such feeling in your words, it's really incredible. To improve this poem, I'd switch around the descriptive a bit and make it ...

    Tue Dec 23, 2008 10:05 pm
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Faith

    This poem is about keeping faith through rough times. Please do not use this poem and your reviews of this poem to bash on Christianity, as this is neither the ...

    Tue Dec 23, 2008 9:59 pm
  • Other Poetry Re: People

    I was thinking the same thing when I posted it, but I'm still thinking about how to end it. I'll edit it as soon as I think of a good ...

    Tue Nov 25, 2008 7:54 pm
  • Other Poetry Re: People

    People The strangest beings Do you see dogs comitting genocide? Raccoons building bombs? No. People are cruel. People The strangest beings Do you see cats falling in love? Birds buying ...

    Mon Nov 24, 2008 7:56 pm
  • Lyrics Re: Stupid

    While I thank everyone for commenting and the critique, I have to say I'm confused. I've recieved come very contradictory posts, including "You have too much emotion" and "You don't ...

    Fri Nov 21, 2008 8:01 pm
  • NovMo Archives Re: What's your NaNo '08 about?

    My story is about a girl who is writing in NaNoWriMo for the first time. It talks about everything, and includes excerpts from her story, which is about a girl ...

    Mon Nov 10, 2008 8:09 pm
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: What a day

    this poem... well, here's my critique: Eat lunch Go to class study study what a drag (class and drag to not rhyme.) what is this day? (this doesn't fit with ...

    Fri Nov 07, 2008 4:43 pm
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Goodbyes

    Two with a different ending. I have to say, I don't like the random use of the word "paradiscal". I seems kinda random and not fitting with the dialogue. Great ...

    Mon Nov 03, 2008 7:43 pm


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