Kiwisatsuma

Hey! :) Hmmm, I like this so far. I love the way you've turned it around with the other countries ganging up on the USA. :D It reminds me a ...

Hey there! :) This is an interesting story idea, and I thought you told it well, especially the way you described the darkness and the fear of the narrator. Grammar ...

Hey! :) I think this is a topic lots of people can relate too, and you argued your case really powerfully. I loved this part: That passion is the ink ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! :D I liked this. You wrote the chase scene well, and I was pretty gripped. Still, I think there are a few things you could improve. ...

Hey there! :) I think this could become a good story beginning, but right now it could definitely be improved. This is a fantasy story, so it's set in a ...

Hey! :) Would you be able to review my September Contest entry? Please don't feel you have to review it by tonight, any time is awesome. :D Thankyou!

Hey! :) Would you be able to review my September Contest entry? But don't feel you have to review it before the competition closes, any time is great. Thankyou! :smt001

Hey there! :) This story is certaintly interesting. You took an odd, silly prompt and wrote a story that's strange and, upon rereading, quite sinister. Still, I think this could ...

Your story is about an artist on Mars wandering in the highlands The artist shut his eyes firmly. The rationalist inside him knew that it was futile; that when he ...

((oops, sorry this is so long! XD)) Talinea I stared in wonder at the bustling city before me. Horse drawn carriages trundled down the thoroughfare, their wealthy passsangers peering down ...

Hey there! :) Wow, I really really like this! I wasn't expecting the twist at all and it worked very well. I love the idea of following a trail of ...

Hey there, As a prologue, I like this. I have only a few nitpicks: She crawled over to the tiny frail body she had carefully wrapped up in the stolen ...

Hey! :) Hmmm, I like this. There's some really good decription and I think the vague, abstractey feel works well. So no light is visible. Light itself doesn’t exist, nothing ...

I have crazy dreams. I don't think I could make any of them into a story because they would make very little sense. There was this one where I was ...

Terence's eyes widened. He knew it! He'd been positive today would be the day he finally got a lead on those elusive griffins and he'd been right. He hadn't expected ...