Kiwisatsuma

Hey there! :) It looks like a really interesting story that's beginning here. I liked the way the conversation between the family members sounded so natural and realistic, and it'll ...

Jeremiah I crossed one my arms indignantly. Oh, so it was one of these , was it? Another kid who thought they were above the official regulations? "Well, I'm sorry, ...

Hey! :) This was an interesting read. It's easy to think of the cold war as something distant thing that happened ages ago, and I like how you made it ...

Hey! :) This sounds like a really cool plot for a story, but I don't think it's really a prologue. It's much more like a blurb that describes in brief ...

Jeremiah Frowning, I checked my monitor screen once more before tucking the tracker in my pocket. According to the reading, there was an illegal Prakfura wandering the streets of the ...

Hey there! :) I like this and it seems like an interesting beginning to your story, but I do think there are a few things you could improve to make ...

Hey! :) Thanks for the request! Having read this through, I have to admit that I can't really think of much to say. This is well written and the plot ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! :D I liked this, especially the way you described the little girl's feelings and the atmosphere in the apartment, and the irony of the way the ...

Hey again! :D a rich tapestry of dark reds and gold were splashed throughout It seems a bit odd to have just one tapestry going running throughout the whole castle ...

Hey! :) So, I like this, especially the description of Baira. Just a couple of nitpicks: There she was with her native village outfit, a piece of cloth tied round ...

Things you might say with a Sheffield accent: Eyoop = hello T'ut = to the reight = right didn't = dint with = wi' tha/thee = you Calling everyone love ...

Hey! :) Welcome to YWS! :D I like this so far. You've got a main character that a lot of people can identify with and a plot that's already getting ...

Leporine turned pink and stepped back, stuttering. Zerimona narrowed her eyes and thrust the power outwards into a thick metal pole from the nearby fence. With a ping it sprang ...

This is my entry for Elinor Brynn's superhero contest. It's pretty ridiculous and proves that I have an incredibly juvenile sense of humour, but at least I managed to finally ...

Hey! :) Well, I reviewed the first chapter ages ago, so I thought I'd come back and read the next one. And wow! I had no idea the plot was ...